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An Eyes Perception Of Happiness
By Adam Jay

How I fell, and how i will continue to fall

Category: Poetry
Genres: Romance, Psychological

Poem 1

A commanding voice echoes with a sweet disposition.

As the facade comes into play, eyes meet

Across the space, and there is a falter. Snap.

Snap! Back to pretending, back to screaming

Dramatic lies. His thoughts turned

 

To a previous interaction. A memory,

Treasured and loved. What a way

To end the day. “And come unto me,

Romeo.” Reality check, a corner smile.

A connection isn’t made. A flicker of char-

Acters; then, a connection. Happiness shared

Between future lovers.

 

A commanding figure is but a distant blur

To the mouthed expressions, the only

Signet of love able to be shown. Desire

Hidden behind badly drawn curtains. A daydream,

And a missed critical point. A few visions

 

Later, and the figures disperse. A solitary

Couple, stood hand in hand. Beaming statues

In a rushed light echo gleam. Opals meet cobalt,

In this predicted day dream.

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Adam Jay

Adam Jay

Posted 7 months ago

This is one of my first poems to use enjambment. I wondered how it would go. Feedback ?!

Ian Black

Ian Black

Posted 7 months ago

The enjambement works really well, for me, and the poem itself is well written. I especially like the last verse. Your use of language is both pleasant for the reader and relatively easy to follow. A success, as always. Xx

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