Rhapsody On A Stormy Sea
By Adam Jay

Like this, Adam. Like its sparseness. Like the form. Why ‘gripped’ ? when all the other verbs are in present immediate tense -‘swallows’ ‘sees’ ‘lets’ ‘crashes’ ‘cracks’ ‘breaks’ ‘shouts’ ‘leaps’ ‘blows’ ‘smiles’ ‘leaves fall’ ‘ungrips’ ‘walks’ ‘falls’ Is there a reason or a typo? I dont know too much about the technical stuff of poetry but I am always unhappy when a writer/poet gives inanimate objects a motive and will to ‘do’ things, as in: The SEA SWALLOWS his thoughts, SEES his mind & LETS him reflect. I dont think & have any place in prose or poetry! Lazy! Nonetheless, I liked this and like your style. Thanks for posting it.

I personified the sea as more his former self... He's seeing his memories in the sea, and watching it happen. As for the gripped...i did write it as grips to begin with, but the feel and image of it having just happened, rather than the image of it happening, was much stronger.

thanks. See what you mean about the sea. Still think 'grips' is better [smiley]

Fair enough ;] Haha.

Adam!!!stunning

Aww, thanks Dick :)